Monday, February 23, 2009

Beautiful girl

One upon a time a rich girl she name kimaka .she is not beautiful girl she no have mother and father.But she have one servant name sola . she live in the castle with Kimaka.at in front of the door have alot of doll and rose because she like and also love doll and rose when at the valentine's she wait for some boy that give her a rose but no one give her because she is not beautiful girl when she saw her face she cry and sad . But she is very rich girl than Kimaka doesn't eat rice 5 day she only live in the room .than sola worry about the healthy of Kimaka .than one day sola she heard the sound of the Kamaka than sola go to push the door that Kamaka faing . that have the old gradmother she said ''I can make Kimaka face is more beautiful than the world '' and than sola late the grandmother go in . the room of kimaka than grandmother siad to sola that can you go out from Kimaka room? than sola siad yes yes I can go . than the grandmother can make the face of Kimaka face more beautiful than the world .than Kimaka wake up than she said What are you doing in my room? than the grandmother siad Kimaka you can look in the mirror. than kimaka very happy that she saw her face is very beautiful. than Kimaka thank you to grandmother.than Kimaka ask to grandmother that "what is your name ?" than grandmother said "my name is granny" .nice to met you granny.Kimaka ask granny Did you have son or daughter than granny said "I doen't have son or daughter" than Kimaka said "do you have house ?" than the granny said "I doen't house to". than Kimaka live with granny 1 month than se saw ganny is a good person than Kimaka said can do my mother because no have mother or father I just have only servent she name sola .than granny cry . why you cry Kimaka said .than granny said because I am very surprise that have a beautiful daughter . than it is Valentine day than Kimaka sit at in front of the door than she saw a handsome man that carry a lot of rose it is 102 .than the man give to Kimaka .than Kimaka ask what is your name ? the handsome man said My name is kitting .why are you give me 102 rose ? because I'm love you said kitting than kitting said can you marry with me ?than Kimaka is said yes I will marry you . than kitting very hapy and he yell very strong .than kimaka laughs .than they marry.rthan they live happily ever after

writing by chamroun

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1 comment:

  1. Chamroun,
    This is a great story! I'm so happy you are writing so much!

    How did Kimaka become so rich? How exactly did Granny make Kimaka beautiful? You said that Kimaka opened her eyes and Granny asked her to look in the mirror, and suddenly she was beautiful. How did Granny do that?

    I like that Granny adopts Kimaka. What happened to Kimaka's parents?

    Rmemeber - we CAPITALIZE names of people. Kimaka and Kitting.

    This story has a very happy ending, Chamroun. You have a very creative mind! I'm impressed.

    When I read it, I think of many questions: is it better to be rich, beautiful, or happy? Does Kimaka need to be beautiful to be happy?

    Keep up the great work!

    -Teacher Robbie

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